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The Ghostbusters August 5, 1983 Draft is a collaborative draft of Ghostbusters by Harold Ramis and Dan Aykroyd.

Overview[]

The August 5, 1983 draft contains the general premise of the final movie version - the Ghostbusters are kicked out of college and go into business and it takes off Dana Barrett goes to them for help and they get a call to the Sedgewick Hotel. However, Winston Zeddemore is already hired and is part of the Sedgewick bust. He ends up getting slimed at the bust. The montage includes more famous journalists and different busts. Peter insults Walter Peck and refuses to let him see the Containment Unit. The Fort Detmerring case is in the draft. Egon interviews the possessed Louis. Peck has the Containment Unit shut down and the Ghostbusters get arrested only to convince Mayor Lenny to let them try to stop Gozer. Gozer instead takes on the form of Ivo Shandor and Winston is the one that thinks of the Stay Puft Marshmallow Man. They cross the streams on Stay Puft and fail to destroy it so they blast the Temple of Gozer into rubble and save the world.

Differences and Similarities[]

  • On page 1, the Librarian is a slightly stout, studious looking girl in her late twenties.
    • In the movie, Alice the Librarian is an elderly woman.
  • On page 2, the Librarian sees the books float across the aisle to the shelf on the other side. She suspects a co-worker named Lyle is playing a prank.
    • In the movie, Alice doesn't see the floating books.
  • On page 3, Peter projects a still photo depicting a hideous demon face. He identifies it as the Shropshire Demon then explains it has been blamed for numerous livestock mutilations in the area and sketched by a local artist in 1910 from actual eyewitness accounts.[1][2]
    • This is kept in the script from the July 6, 1983 draft.
  • On page 4, Peter tells Dean Yeager and the committee about an instantaneous rockfall.[3]
  • On page 5, Ray appears outside the glass door of the meeting room and tries to get Peter's attention to tell him about the Library ghost sighting. He is described as Peter's oldest friend.[4]
    • In the movie, Ray interrupts Peter in the lab with the news.
  • On page 6, Peter points out in the last 12 months, they investigated 72 ghost sightings and found nothing so he is skeptical about the Library ghost.[5]
  • On page 7, Egon is revealed to have been the sole reason Peter got through graduate school.[6]
  • On page 8, Ray asks the Librarian if the ghost looked like a mist or vapor and if it had arms and legs.
    • In the movie, the sequence starts with Alice saying she knew it had arms.
  • On page 9, a paramedic questions Peter's menstruation question and responds "F off, I'm a scientist."
    • In the movie, Roger Delacorte questions it and Peter tells him to "Back off, I'm a scientist."
  • On page 12, the Library ghost screams "Quiet!" as they try to rush her.
    • In the movie, the ghost only screams "Raahhhh!!!" at them.
  • On page 13, Peter teases Ray's plan as they run out the library. Egon hot-wired his mini-computer into a pay phone and programs the new data. He explains he patched into the Bell Labs computer in Boston to confirm they can capture a ghost. Peter knocks on Egon's head and declares, "Solid gold."
    • In the movie, Peter teases the plan when they back at Columbia University. All three run out together and don't stop.
  • On page 14, it is revealed they are employed at New York University.[7] A drug dealer tries to sell them dope but Egon misunderstands him, reaches in his pocket and gives him a joint. Peter aspires to winning a Nobel Prize. Egon points out he and Ray should win it since they did the hard research and designed the equipment. Peter retorts he introduced them so that should count for something.[8]
    • The joint gag is kept in the script from the July 6, 1983 draft.
    • In the movie, they were employed by Columbia University.
  • On page 15, a coed named Beth accosts Peter and asks why she got a D on her midterm despite the "deal" they had. As soon as Peter, Egon, and Ray enter the lab, a workman scraps their names off with a razor.
  • On page 16, Peter reacts to being fired by bringing up what happened to Galileo. Yeager tells them it could be worse, the astronomer Phileas had his head staked to the town gate.
  • On page 17-18, Peter, Egon, and Ray go to Irving Trust on the Avenue of Americas. The loan officer is unsure of what parapsychology is. He thinks they want to start up a kind of mini-psychiatric medical center. He offers to underwrite an initial loan of $25,000 and overlooking the matter of collateral until they get established. He stares at Ray when Ray says the name of the business is "Ghostbusters."
  • On page 19, Egon's car is listed as a 1957 Saab.[9] Egon contends the lot size is 9,642.5 square feet, not 10,000 as the real estate woman says.
  • On page 20, the No-Ghost sign is put up outside the firehouse.
    • In the movie, a white banner with "GHOSTBUSTERS" in typeface is put up. The No-Ghost sign doesn't show up until Chapter 14: Welcome Aboard.
  • On page 21, Peter gives Janine copies of their advertising: a business ad in the Times, Voice, and Post, the Help Wanted item for a security man, a Yellow Pages quarter page, and copy of their TV spot he needs her to type out for the shoot tomorrow. Then Ray arrives with a a blue and white, 1975 Cadillac Full Formal Excelsior Ambulance that he bought for $600.
    • This is kept in the script from the July 6, 1983 draft. The gag is Egon finding the comedic ad amusing is omitted.
    • In the movie, Peter doesn't give Janine anything and tells her to type something.
  • On page 23, Dana rides her 10 speed bike up Riverside Drive with her groceries in the carrier basket.
    • In the movie, Dana takes a taxi cab.
  • On page 24, Dana gets out on her floor, the thirty fifth floor. Louis is described as a portly swinger. He tells Dana she missed a great party the night before. Dana tells him she had two auditions then shot a commercial all afternoon.
    • In the movie, they live on the twenty secondth floor. Louis tells Dana it's a great party she's missing later on in Chapter 16: Dogs Drag Dana.
  • On page 25, Janine is shown answering the phone in the commercial.
    • In filmed material not used, Janine is shown by the front door waving.
  • On page 26, in the commercial, Egon is shown using his P.K.E. Meter in the basement. The Proton Pack is featured. Singers sing a lyric, "Ghostbusters - you have a ghost. But you don't want to play host..."
  • On page 27, slices of Wonder Bread toast themselves and fall forward like dominoes then the eggs spill onto the counter and fry.
    • The Wonder Bread is added to the sequence from the July 6, 1983 draft.
    • In the movie, only the eggs cook.
  • On page 28, in the refrigerator, a terrible presence whispers loudly to Dana, "Zuul!! Gatekeeper." She slams the refrigerator shut. The eggs are back in the cartons and the bread back in the bag like nothing happened. The interior of the refrigerator is back to normal, too. After she leaves, every metal utensil and appliance flies across the kitchen and sticks to the refrigerator.
    • In the movies, nothing reverts to normal. Vinz speaks instead.
  • On page 29, Ray interviews Winston for the security guard position. He did five years with the U.S. Air Force Air Police, mustered out as Captain assigned to administer perimeter security at Reese Strategic Air Command Base where he designed electronic barrier systems for Sentry Alarms and ended up as V.P. Tactics and Training at their Pacific Headquarters until the offices closed. He has a fifteenth degree black belt in Wing Chun boxing and a qualified, award-winning weapons handler.[10][11] Ray tells them they catch ghosts. Winston asks them what they really do.
    • In the July 6, 1983 draft, Peter interviews Winston and noted he was overqualified.
    • In the movie, Winston is interviewed later on in Chapter 14: Welcome Aboard and none of his credentials are revealed.
  • On page 30, Janine has a heated call with a bill collector then mistakes Dana for one, too.
    • In the movie, Janine is filing her nails.
  • On page 31, Dana tells Janine her name first then she buzzes Peter who rushes out. He gives Dana a cigarette to calm her nerves. She tells Peter about what happened.
    • In the movie, Dana tells her name to Peter. She is shown being interviewed on the second floor.
  • On page 33, Dana tells Peter her psychiatrist thinks she's losing her mind and her friends think she is addicted to LSD.
  • On page 36, Peter offers to stay the night. Dana threatens to scream.
    • In the movie, Peter tells her he is madly in love with her then vows to solve the case to prove himself to her.
  • On page 37-40, a groom and bride encounter a foul yellow vapor after they consummate their marriage in room 1210 of the Sedgewick Hotel.[12]
  • On page 40, Ray, Egon, Winston are eating Chinese take out. Winston still does not believe in the paranormal. Ray tells him about the Manse Turbulence in Pennsylvania. It involved major structural damage, multiple full head and torso manifestations, and ecto fluids.[13]
  • On page 41, Winston indicated it has been three weeks since he was hired and there hasn't been one call. Ray tells him data collected is pointing to the possibility of a massive dimensional rip like the Manse Turbulence or four fold crossover like the Tunguska Blast.[14]
    • In the movie, it is Ray, Peter, and Egon eating.
  • On page 42, Peter tells him about how Dana thinks she's someone named Zuul and is being chased by someone named "Gozer." The name "Gozer" sounds familiar to Egon but they get a call. They depart in an all black Ecto-1 and head up the West Side Highway.
    • Dana only mentions Zuul. Ecto-1 is white.
  • On page 43, they enter the hotel in matching blue futuristic jumpsuits with proton packs strapped to their backs, Nutrona wands clamped to their wrists, and brushed-metal, flip-down ecto-visors worn on the head like a welder's mask.[15] The Hotel Manager is accompanied by a Slavic maintenance man and a worried Bell Captain.
  • On page 43, the Hotel Manager admitted there was a previous disturbance involving Slimer when he first started working at the Sedgewick years ago.[16]
  • On page 44, the Man at Elevator speaks to Winston instead of Peter. Peter realizes they never had a successful field test.
  • On page 45, a Puerto Rican bell boy is almost blasted after they leave the elevator. They investigate Room 1210.
    • In July 6, 1983 draft, they immediately encounter the yellow vapor.
    • In the movie, they almost blast a Chambermaid.
  • On page 46-47, Egon interviews a woman in a bath towel. After he asks her if she noticed anything yellow and unusually smelly in her bathroom she slams the door on him. A fat 10 year old boy eating bread sticks follows Ray and Peter and annoys them. He notes they look like spacemen.
  • On page 49, Ray and Peter find the yellow vapor eating at a cart. Ray has second thoughts, thinking he was once a human like someone's grandfather. Peter points out everyone hated his grandfather.[17]
    • In July 6, 1983 draft, they all fire on the vapor.
    • In the movie, Ray finds the green ghost eating at a cart and doesn't hesitate to fire.
  • On page 50, a man in a hotel room pulls the plastic bag off his recently dry-cleaned white dinner jacket but the yellow vapor flies over him and ruins the jacket. The vapor slimes Winston next.
    • In July 6, 1983 draft, Peter is slimed a little.
    • In the movie, Peter gets slimed.
  • On page 53, after Egon warns against crossing the streams, Winston takes charge and orders everyone when to fire on the vapor.
    • In the movie, Ray takes charge.
  • On page 55, they open fire and form a loose trapezoidal configuration around the vapor.
    • This is kept in from the July 6, 1983 draft.
  • On page 56, Peter throws out the trap.
    • In the movie, Ray throws out the trap.
  • On page 57, Peter doesn't think that was so bad but Winston likens it to pushing smoke into a bottle with a baseball bat.
    • In the movie, Ray doesn't think it was so bad.
  • On page 58, they charge $5000 for entrapment plus $500 for proton recharge and storage.
    • In the movie, they charge $4000 and $1000 for each.
  • On page 59-61, the Ghostbusters are interviewed by reporters outside. A punk asks Egon if they could beat Superman and he asserts they could on Krypton. They sing the Ghostbusters jingle.
    • In July 6, 1983 draft, the singing ended in "Who you gonna call? Ghostbusters!".
  • On page 62, Ronald Gwynne reports about the Ghostbusters from the United Press International in New York. The Ghostbusters bust a ghost in a huge Flying Tigers cargo plane on an airport runway.
  • On page 63, Bryant Gumble on the "Today" show introduces Roy Brady in New York who talks about his grandmother's yarn about the spectral locomotive that used to rocket past the farm.[18]
    • In the movie, Roy is an unnamed reporter and starts off the sequence himself.
  • On page 63, the Ghostbusters emerge from the New York Health and Racquet Club and Winston holds up a trap. The headline reads, "Spook Squashed at Racquet Club."
    • In the movie, when Egon takes Louis's wallet from Janine, left of Egon's right shoulder are several articles on the wall. Above the red clipping is one with the headline, "Spook Squashed at Racquet Club."
  • On page 64, they trap a ghost in the Bullion Vault at the Federal Assay Office in Downtown. Diane Sawyer interviews Ray on the CBS Morning News. She notes a similarity to Bob Hope's movie. Ray identities that as "Ghostbreakers."
    • In the movie, Ray is interviewed by Joe Franklin and asked about Elvis.
  • On page 65, a female caller tells Larry King she thinks Egon was right in the interview last night about the world being in store for a "psychic shock" because her aunt reads coffee grounds. A Motor Trend cover hails Ecto-1 as "Car of the Year."
  • On page 66, Winston tells Ray and Peter they look terrible after they return from a job.
    • In July 6, 1983 draft, they all gripe.
    • In the movie, Peter tells Ray he looks terrible.
  • On page 67, after Janine tells Peter he promised to hire more help, he tells her to call up Dana.
    • In the movie, Peter overtly reminds her of the other jobs she's qualified for.
  • On page 68, Egon says he is concerned about an overload in the Containment Unit and thinks they need a spill/release system. Winston and Ray look at the video monitor to see inside the unit. It looks like a sad and frightening limbo and a most unholy makeshift asylum. Winston thinks it looks too depressing. Egon thinks they're on the verge of something of the order of the Tunguska Blast.
  • On page 69, Walter Peck is described as a junior E.P.A. Administrator.[19]
  • On page 74-75, Louis' party demonstrated his earthier interests.[20]
  • On page 78, while running out of the apartment, Louis passes by the two Bums then jumps into a cab first. The Terror Dog jumps on the hood but the driver curses at it then speeds off. The Terror Dog falls off but keeps chasing.[21]
  • On page 79, Louis is dragged out of the cab by the angry driver, he runs into Central Park and stops at a tunnel entrance out of breath and gets possessed by the Terror Dog.
    • In the movie, Louis proceeds directly to the park.
  • On page 84, Peter calls Egon about the possessed Dana but he doesn't know what to do. Possessed Louis is not at the Firehouse yet.
  • On page 85, Ray is driving on the Hudson Parkway heading north with Winston. Ray admits he's Christian and likes Jesus' style. Winston agrees. Ray think the total massacre of the Phillistines would make a great movie.
    • In the movie, Ray only replies "Never met him" to be asked if he believes in God. Only Winston admits he likes Jesus' style.
  • On pages 86-87 and 91-93, Ray and Winston investigate Fort Detmerring.
    • This is kept in from the July 6, 1983 draft.
  • On page 87, Janine notices Egon doing research and asks him if he likes to read because she does so people think she's too intellectual and she also likes racquetball. Egon tells her he collects spores, molds, and fungus then offers to show her his collection. She is interested.
  • On page 88, Egon answers a knock and talks to the Police Sergeant. He admits it took him and seven officers to restrain the possessed Louis.[22]
  • On page 88-89, Egon denies he is the Gatekeeper then asks him who he is. He introduces himself as Vinz Clortho. It is Vinz's mention of Gozer that convinces Egon to take custody of him. He is interviewed by Egon in the basement.
    • The blood test and offer of a dehydrated food based meal from the July 6, 1983 draft is omitted.
    • In the movie, Louis is interviewed on the second floor with Janine present.
  • On page 90, possessed Dana is asleep but still floating three feet off the bed. Egon calls the apartment to tell Peter he has Vinz.
    • In the movie, Egon uses the P.K.E. Meter to scan possessed Louis.
    • In the movie, Dana is asleep on the bed. Peter calls the Firehouse.
  • On page 94, Peck is accompanied by the Con Edison worker and a County Sheriff. The sheriff lists off all the documents he requested.
  • On page 95, Janine scans Peck's documents and equates it to 'what happened in Poland.' Egon implores Peck to look at the video monitor of the Containment Unit but he refuses.
  • On page 97, Peter grabs the Con Edison man before he reaches a switch then the sheriff pulls him away.
    • In the movie, Peter only gets in his path and tells him not to be a jerk then the captain tells him to step aside.
  • On page 99, after Ray and Winston return to the Firehouse, he alludes to being in love with the ghost at Fort Detmerring and laments she's been dead for 150 years.[23]
  • On page 100, a hazardous-chemical expert in a bulky decontamination suit, Fire Chief, and Fire Captain ask Egon about what is in the ecto material. Egon tells them not to use water.
  • On page 101, after Peck accuses the Ghostbusters of being on drugs, Egon threatens to rip out his septum.
    • In the July 6, 1983 draft, Peck and the Police Chief come over to arrest them. Before the Ghostbusters are read their Miranda Rights, a lieutenant comes over and alerts them that the Mayor has requested they come to City Hall because "the whole island is going crazy."
    • In the movie, Peck lists off the environmental law then Egon responds, "Your mother!" and rushes Peck.
  • On page 102, the Hot Dog Vendor is outside the Sedgewick Hotel and chases after his cart and Slimer into the hotel.[24]
  • On page 102, the Mink Coat manifested during a fashion show when the Containment Unit was shut down.[25]
  • On page 103, the Businessman in Cab asks to go to the Gulf and Western Building.
    • In the movie, he wants to go to the Columbia Building.
  • On page 103-104, a ghost molester hassles women in the accounts department of a major corporation.
  • On page 104-105, possessed Louis scares off would-be muggers in Central Park.
  • On page 105, the Businessman in Cab reads his Wall Street Journal oblivious of the situation he's in.
  • On page 105-106, at St. Mark's Playhouse near Second Avenue, a ghost is mistaken as part of the 3-D movie.
  • On page 106-107, in the NYPD Lock-Up, a biker recognizes the Ghostbusters. He tells them if they get sent to Riker's Island, looks for a guy named "Gash" and say they know him, "The Hook."
    • This is the first draft that includes the Ghostbusters being held in lock-up. The links with Gozer, Zuul, Vinz, Dana, and such were previously done in the Mayor's office in the July 6, 1983 draft.
  • The Roylance Guide was known as the Roylance Catalog of Secret Sects and Societies. On page 107, Egon recites information from the book - The name Gozer refers to "an ancient demonic spirit that was worshipped in a lost pre-Sumerian society known as the Sebouillias. The Sebouillias disappeared without a trace but the ancient Sumerians kept a fragment from their religious text called the Glethestement."
    • In the movie, the Roylance Guide is mentioned earlier when Peter meets with Dana at the Lincoln Center in Chapter 14: Welcome Aboard.
    • In the movie, Egon gets his research from Tobin's Spirit Guide.
  • It was explained the Sebouillia are a lost pre-Sumerian society that worshiped Gozer but they disappeared without a trace. The ancient Sumerians kept a fragment from their religious text, the Glethestement, which was written in Sanskrit. A rough translation reveals the Sebouillias suffered from decadence and Gozer destroyed them for their sins. It was similar to the plight of Sodom and Gomorrah in the Bible.[26][27][28][29][30]
  • On page 109, it is mentioned the Temple of Gozer was an exact replica of a Sebouillian temple.[31] It is also mentioned Ivo Shandor built the apartment building in 1923.[32] Peter places it on 78th and Riverside.[33]
  • On page 109, Ivo Shandor was electrocuted at Sing Sing after his attempted abduction of a teenage girl led police to his penthouse apartment, furnished impeccably with stacks of human bones.[34][35]
  • On page 110, the Hook is worried and tells them they better get on the phone. A group of police officers come for the Ghostbusters on the Mayor's behalf.
    • In the movie, it's just one Jail Guard who gets the Ghostbusters.
  • On page 111, the Archbishop is already present. The Regional Director of the EPA and the Governor are listed as being present.
    • In the movie, the Archbishop comes after the Ghostbusters.
  • On page 112, Winston introduces himself to the Mayor then the Fire Commissioner weighs in and is convinced that was no light show.
    • In the movie, the order is the other way around.
  • On page 113, Peter likens Gozer to the biggest disaster since Diana Ross got rained out of Central Park.
  • On page 114, possessed Louis arrives at the apartment. A neighbor, Mrs. Blum, tells him there was an earthquake or something then leaves with her husband and an armload of electronics.
    • This draft omits the disturbances in the elevator used by Louis/Vinz.
  • On page 115, in the City Hall loading dock, Ray tells the Mayor about what will happen: something of really Biblical proportions and real old Testament stuff. Winston and Egon finish charging the Proton Packs off the dock's current. Ray continues and tells the Mayor it's wrath of God type of stuff: seas boil, fire and brimstone falling from the sky, forty years of darkness, earthquakes, mass hysteria, human sacrifice.
    • In the movie, Ray's description comes earlier in the Mayor's office and the lines are shared among the four Ghostbusters in Chapter 24: Biblical.
  • On page 116, a police captain tells Peter all the measures they took at the apartment. The Mayor's aide makes a note to alert the Red Cross. Janine tells Egon she's usually very psychic and has a terrible feeling he's going to die. He tells her he's not afraid and Egon sees the universe as a living organism every particle of which is constantly transforming from matter to energy and they are just tiny parts of that organism like bacteria living on a rotting speck of dust floating in an infinite void. She finds it romantic and they hug. Peter reminds everyone that no matter what happens they are professionals.
    • In the movie, Janine's premonition happens earlier after possessed Louis is interviewed in Chapter 20: Keymaster.
    • In the movie, Peter's we're professionals line comes later on while they suit up to go into the apartment in Chapter 25: Working the Crowd.
  • On page 119, Winston suggests they take a plan to Australia or Indonesia until it blows over. Peter makes a note of it. After the hole in the street, a huge gust of hot wind from the lobby blows out the glass transom above the doors and showers everyone in safety glass. The Ghostbusters fight against the wind as they walk into the building.
  • On page 120, Ray pushes the button for the elevator but it crashes down in the basement. They opt to use the stairs.
  • On page 122, Gozer is described as a "thin, hollow-cheeked, distinguished-looking man in his early sixties. His eyes are burning red pinholes."
    • In the movie, Gozer takes an androdrynous female form.
  • On page 123, Egon recognizes he looks like Ivo Shandor. Winston likens him to Robert Young. Peter identifies him as Gozer. Ray goes up the stairs on his own to talk to Gozer.
  • On page 124, Winston tells Ray he should have said "Yes!" and maybe Gozer would have been willing to negotiate.
  • On page 125, after Gozer vanishes, Egon uses his P.K.E. Meter.
  • On page 126, Peter realizes if they think of Roberto Clemente, Roberto Clemente will appear and destroy them all.
    • In the movie, Peter uses J. Edgar Hoover as the example.
  • On page 127, Ray protests they didn't think of anything. It was Winston who admits he couldn't help it and it just popped in his head.
    • In the movie, Peter protests they didn't think of anything then Ray admits he couldn't help it.
  • On page 128, the Stay Puft Marshmallow Man rises up from the Hudson River.
    • In the movie, Stay Puft debuts mid-march in the city.
  • On page 129, Winston tells them he roasted marshmallows with his grandfather at his smokehouse in North Carolina.[36] Egon tells them to go full stream with strogon pulse then cross their streams onto Stay Puft.[37]
    • In the movie, Ray is the one that thinks of Stay Puft and roasted the marshmallows at Camp Waconda.
    • In the movie, they only blast Stay Puft then cross the streams on the Temple of Gozer.
  • On page 130, Peck grabs a cop and tells him to go to the roof and arrest the Ghostbusters. The cop thinks he's insane then sees Stay Puft and bolts.
  • On page 131, after the Ghostbusters' plan only ignites Stay Puft, Peck is doused in marshmallow. Peter bemoans they are going to be killed by a 300 foot marshmallow man.
  • On page 133, they shoot at the temple and destroy it. In the maelstrom to follow, Stay Puft is blown up and Louis and Dana are turned back into humans.
  • On page 134, as they come to, Louis quickly denies he did anything to Dana.
  • On page 135, the Bums examine the marshmallow residue and conclude there is a very large cup of hot chocolate near by somewhere. The movie ends with the Ghostbusters driving off in the Ectomobile with the people cheering them on wildly.
    • From this draft and on, the epilogue seen in the July 6, 1983 draft is dropped in favor of the Ghostbusters simply driving away in Ecto-1 to the cheers of the crowds of people outside the apartment building.

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Trivia[]

  • On Cover B of Ghostbusters Year One Issue #2, under the P.K.E. Meter is a passage "from a vantage...Librarian as the –" which is from the start of the August 5, 1983, September 30, 1983, and October 7, 1983 drafts of the first movie. The full passage is, "A single eerie musical note signals the presence of something strange looking down on the Librarian from a vantage point high above the room. It follows the Librarian as she pushes her cart around the corner."

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References[]

  1. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 3). Line reads: "A projected still photo depicts a hideous demon face.""
  2. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 3). Peter Venkman says: "The Shropshire Demon, ladies and gentlemen, blamed for numerous livestock mutilations in the area and sketched by a local artist in 1910 from actual eyewitness accounts.""
  3. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 4). Peter Venkman says: "Stones and pebbles somehow materialize and fall out of the sky from an untraceable source.""
  4. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 5). Line reads: "RAY STANTZ, Venkman's partner and oldest friend, appears through the glass door and gesticulates wildly.""
  5. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 6). Peter Venkman says: "Ray, in the past twelve months we have investigated seventy-two such apparitions and seen absolutely nothing and now you interrupt the most important meeting of our professional lives to tell me about apparition number seventy-three..""
  6. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 7). Line reads: "Spengler is a real egghead, a New Wave Mr. Spock, who single handedly got Venkman through graduate school.""
  7. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 14). Line reads: "Venkman, Stantz and Spengler head for their lab in Weaver Hall on the NYU campus.""
  8. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 14). Peter Venkman says: "Yeah, but I introduced you guys. You never would've met if not for me.""
  9. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 19). Line reads: "Spengler's '57 Saab is parked outside an abandoned brick, four-story fire station built by the city around the turn of the century.""
  10. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 29). Winston Zeddemore says: "Five years, U.S. Air Force Air Police. I mustered out as Captain assigned to administer perimeter security at Reese Strategic Air Command Base... from there I designed electronic barrier systems for Sentry Alarms and I ended up as V.P. Tactics and Training at their Pacific Headquarters... until they closed the offices there.""
  11. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 29). Winston Zeddemore says: "I have a fifteenth degree black belt in Wing Chun boxing and I am a qualified, award-winning weapons handler .""
  12. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 40). Line reads: "As the newly-weds comfort each other, the bathroom door opens and through it into the full light glides the source of their discomfort - a truly foul yellow vapor. They cover their mouths, cough and run out the door of the suite into the hall, shouting and hacking.""
  13. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 40). Line reads: "Did you ever hear of the Manse Turbulence? Farmhouse in Pennsylvania -- major structural damage, multiple full head and torso manifestations -- ecto fluids. Boy, the walls were alive on that one.""
  14. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 41). Line reads: "About us being on the verge of a rip...massive rip like the Manse Turbulence or the Tunguska Blast...you know, a four-fold crossover.""
  15. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 43). Line reads: "They all wear matching blue futuristic jumpsuits with proton packs strapped to their backs and Nutrona wands clamped to their wrists. They also wear brushed-metal, flip-down ecto-visors worn on the head like a welder's mask.""
  16. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 43). Hotel Manager says: "This happened once before. Years ago, though, when I first started working here.""
  17. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 49). Hotel Manager says: "Everybody hated my grandfather.""
  18. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 63). Bryant Gumble says: "Roy Brady reports from New York.""
  19. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 69). Bryant Gumble says: "WALTER PECK, a junior E.P.A. administrator, is reading one of the articles when Venkman walks in.""
  20. Shay, Don (November 1985). Making Ghostbusters, p. 115 annotation. New York Zoetrope, New York NY USA, ISBN 0918432685. Paragraph reads: "As originally scripted for John Candy, the Louis Tully character was to have had decidedly earthier interests -- best evidenced in the party sequence as it appeared in the August draft."
  21. Shay, Don (November 1985). Making Ghostbusters, p. 121 annotation. New York Zoetrope, New York NY USA, ISBN 0918432685. Paragraph reads: "In the August draft, Louis' attempted escape into Central Park is preceded by a sequence in which -- having just emerged from the apartment house -- he flags down a passing taxi and jumps inside. Seconds later, the Terror Dog bounds out of the building and launches itself onto the hood of the cab. In true New York form, the driver hurls a few expletives at the beast, guns his motor and speeds away, causing the creature to lose its balance and fall by the wayside. Undaunted, the Terror Dog takes off in hot pursuit, chasing the taxi through the streets of Manhattan."
  22. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 88). Police Sergeant says: "It took eight of us to restrain him."
  23. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 99). Ray Stantz says: "She's been dead for one hundred and fifty years."
  24. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 102). Paragraph reads: "It belches loudly at the gaping spectators, then flits past the Doorman into the hotel with the pushcart following under its own power. He shouts and chases it into the hotel."
  25. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 102). Paragraph reads : "She starts down the runway in a very exotic furcoat. She reaches the end of the runway and pirouettes for the customers. Suddenly a yapping mink head pops out of the shoulder of the coat, then another and another until the whole coat is a mess of writhing, yapping rodents. The model screams and throws the coat off."
  26. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 107). Egon says: "This is from the Roylance Catalog of Secret Sects and Societies. The name Gozer refers to an ancient demonic spirit that was worshipped in a lost pre-Sumerian society known as the Sebouillias. The Sebouillias disappeared without a trace but the ancient Sumerians kept a fragment from their religious text called the Glethestement."
  27. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 108). Egon says: "It's in Sanskrit."
  28. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 108). Winston says: "This won't be word for word, but it's close. "...and the people grew fat in their...something...and there came upon the land a foul...something...something...cast into the fires...for the sins of their..." This word is either "city" or "shoes." I'm not sure."
  29. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 108). Egon says: "...yes, "sins of the city." Then it says something about doing things to virgins and wicked revelry and then "came the Traveller, Gozer the Gozerian, Volguus Zildrohar, and death was their lot."
  30. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 108). Ray says: "Kind of sounds like Sodom and Gomorrah... or Vegas."
  31. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 109). Egon Spengler says: "On the roof, he put an exact replica of a Sebouillian temple."
  32. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 109). Egon Spengler says: "It was completed in 1923. Shandor lived in the penthouse."
  33. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 109). Peter Venkman says: "Dana's building. On 78th and Riverside."
  34. Shay, Don (November 1985). Making Ghostbusters, p. 152 annotation. New York Zoetrope, New York NY USA, ISBN 0918432685. Paragraph reads: "Shandor was dropped altogether from the first two Aykroyd-Ramis collaborations, but resurfaced in the third - in name, at any rate - with an even more unsavory background than that suggested by the final shooting script. As recounted by Spengler in the August draft, Ivo Shandor was a deranged surgeon, architect and Gozer worshipper, electrocuted at Sing Sing after his attempted abduction of a teenage girl led police to his penthouse apartment, furnished impeccably - if not tastefully - with stacks of human bones."
  35. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 109). Egon Spengler says: "Well, no one knows for sure, but in May of 1928, Shandor was arrested after trying to carry off a teenage girl in a gunnysack. The police searched his apartment and found piles of human bones. He was electrocuted at Sing Sing on October 28, 1929."
  36. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 129). Winston Zeddemore says: "The Stay-Puft Marshmallow Man! He was on all the packages we used to buy when I was a kid in North Carolina. We used to roast Stay-Puft marshmallows on my grandpa's smokehouse fire."
  37. Aykroyd, Dan & Ramis, Harold (1983). Ghostbusters (First Draft August 5, 1983) (Script p. 129). Egon Spengler says: "Full-stream with strogon pulse. We'll cross the beams."

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