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The Ghostbusters October 7, 1983 Draft is a collaborative draft of Ghostbusters by Harold Ramis and Dan Aykroyd.

Overview[]

The October 7, 1983 draft is slightly tweaked from the Ghostbusters September 30, 1983 Draft and resembles the final movie even more. More gags are added to the New York City Public Library. The Ghostbusters commercial is longer and includes a fictional family. Peter meets with Dana at the Lincoln Center. Winston Zeddemore has The Twinkie line. Ray Stantz thinks of the Stay Puft Marshmallow Man and Camp Waconda. The Ghostbusters dig Dana Barrett and Louis Tully out of the charred Terror Dog remains.

Differences and Similarities[]

  • On page 7, Peter slams the hardcover on the desk to get Egon as he listens to a table with his stethoscope.
  • On page 8, Peter recalls the time Egon tried to drill a hole in his head. The Librarian's interview is how it appears in the movie, including the St. Jerome mention and "Back off, man! I'm a scientist."
  • On page 11, Peter tells Roger Delacorte they'll get back to him as they run out the library.
  • On page 12, Peter, Ray, and Egon walk through Columbia University campus much like in the movie up to Egon's line, "I'm always serious." At the entrance to the lab, Peter gives Egon a candy bar.
    • In the movie, Peter gives Egon the bar right after his serious line.
  • On page 16, the Proton Pack test from previous drafts is omitted and moves on from the Real Estate Woman scene to Dana walking to the apartment.
  • On page 17-18, the Ghostbusters commercial is an extended commercial with a fictional family acting scared, Ray says all the opening lines, and the family sings the jingle at the end. Read excerpt here.
    • In the movie, the commercial more resembles versions from past drafts.
    • Elements of commercial are reused for the commercial in Ghostbusters II. One of the mother's lines, "It's that darn ghost again," is spoken by Janine. One of the father's lines, "I guess we'll just have to move," is spoken by Louis.
  • On pages 21-22, Egon and Janine Melnitz's hobby bit is now moved to after Dana's refrigerator scene. Dana walking into the Firehouse returns in this draft and she speaks to Peter.
    • In the movie, she talks to Janine first.
  • On page 24, Dana's line about trying to find the right apartment for 3 years and her friends thinking she is on LSD is omitted and replaced with a line that if she moves out, she admits it was real. Peter notices the cello and plays it like a stand up bass.
    • Peter plays the cello like a guitar in Ghostbusters II.
  • On page 25, Dana remarks Peter is like a used car salesman.
    • In the movie, she remarks he's like a game show host.
  • On page 43, Roger Grimsby replaces Ronald Gwynne as the first journalist and introduces Roy Brady instead of Bryant Gumble in the montage.
  • On pages 43-44, the Tudor City bust appears. Joe Franklin replaces the Dianne Sawyer scene.
  • On page 45, the Lincoln Center and Violinist scene appears for the first time in a draft.
  • On page 47, Dana tells the Violinist that Peter is an old professor of hers and looks smarter than he looks.
    • In the movie, she tells him Peter is an old friend and a scientist.
  • On page 52, Winston now says, "That's a big Twinkie."
  • On page 85, Peter deducing Ivo Shandor was really Gozer is omitted and the sequence is changed so Ray alone suspects it is Gozer.
    • In the movie, the all know its Gozer and Peter sends Ray.
  • On page 87, Ray gives the Roberto Clemente example.
    • In the movie, Peter gives the example of J. Edgar Hoover.
  • On page 88, Ray thinks of the Stay Puft Marshmallow Man.
    • In previous drafts, Winston thought of Stay Puft.
  • On page 89, Ray reminisces about Camp Waconda.
    • In previous drafts, it was Winston's grandfather's smokehouse in North Carolina.
  • On page 92, the Ghostbusters now dig Dana and Louis out of the charred Terror Dog remains.
    • In past drafts, Dana and Louis were simply changed back to normal.

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Trivia[]

  • The Script Supervisor's lined copy of the draft is in display case in the Ghost Corps office. It was featured at the 10:45 mark of the November 23, 2021 episode of Tested on YouTube, "Adam Savage and Jason Reitman Talk Ghostbusters: Afterlife!" and several pages were shown.[1]
  • On the bottom left side of Cover B of Ghostbusters Year One Issue #1, there is a Second Dan Black Belt in Karate. From the September 30, 1983 draft to the final shooting script for Ghostbusters and on page 136 of Ghostbusters: The Supernatural Spectacular, Winston's resume listed him as a black belt in karate.
  • On Cover B of Ghostbusters Year One Issue #2, under the P.K.E. Meter is a passage "from a vantage...Librarian as the –" which is from the start of the August 5, 1983, September 30, 1983, and October 7, 1983 drafts of the first movie. The full passage is, "A single eerie musical note signals the presence of something strange looking down on the Librarian from a vantage point high above the room. It follows the Librarian as she pushes her cart around the corner."

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